Wow, this story is incredibly moving—so raw, honest, and full of heart. It captures the complexity of motherhood, love, and the hard choices we make to protect the ones we care about. The mix of innocence in Ellie’s imagination and the harsh reality Emily faces creates a powerful emotional contrast that really pulls you in.
The astronaut lie is a beautiful metaphor for hope and escape, and the way Jason gently steps into their lives as a kind of “space daddy” feels tender and real. Then the twist with Brian, the biological father, and his ulterior motives adds tension and highlights the courage it takes to stand up for your child’s well-being.
The ending, where Emily finds comfort in Jason’s support and love, feels like a hopeful new beginning after the storm — it leaves you rooting for them.
If you want, I can help polish it more for clarity, pacing, or add dialogue beats. Or if you’re thinking of turning it into a short story or a script, I’d be happy to help with that too!
Also, would you want a title suggestion or a short summary for sharing it?